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Monday, October 31, 2011

Halloween is Monday

 Happy Halloween Everyone!     






Happy Halloween Everyone!  I'm trying something new this year.  This year I'm not buying candy, no I'm not a grudge when it comes to Halloween.  It's just that every year I get less and less kids coming to my house to collect it.  My neighborhood has changed over the years; so much so that this year I'm taking my kids to a friends house to trick or trick. 

Last year was a disaster.  You see there are a lot of senior citizens in my neighborhood.  So even though new young family have moved they are out trick or tricking as well so nobody is home to give out candy.  My husband and I took turns every year walking with the kids so their was always someone home to give out candy.  The younger family today (wow that made me sound old and I'm not) don't do that.  They all go out as a family, wich is nice BUT: They leave theirs lights off and no candy on the stoop. Sucks for the neighbors kids!

So this year I'm taking my kids out of the neighborhood to a friends house a few blocks away where there are tons of kids and families.  My kids are really looking forward to it and I am too.  I get to socialize with my friends just like they do.  For me, it's a win win situation.  They get more candy and we both get to hang out with our friends.
 So Have a Happy Halloween!  And make sure to stay safe, travel in groups, and get lots of candy!



Monday, October 24, 2011

Stand Out Synopsis: Just Justice MG


Although he isn’t able to find anything on the internet about the strange website, with Pete’s help he discovers a newspaper article over Jenny’s death four years before. All the other kids pictured on the website come up as reported missing.

When Jenny next appears, she tells Tad about her own tragic death and the role her older sister played in it. She tries to use Tad’s pity to convince him that Dorks was responsible for Dan’s behavior, but Tad knows this is not true. Realizing that Jenny is after Dorks, Tad goes after her and finds her at a party with Dan. As a gigantic bag of firecrackers explodes, Dorks throws herself over Tad to protect him, proving that she still cares.

Tad convinces Dorks to take him home, but knows it won’t do any good. Jenny materializes above them and announces her intentions to destroy Dorks as a final act of friendship. Sisters like Dorks—sister’s like Jenny’s had been—must receive due justice. (Get rid of the line.  I don't think you need sisters like Jenny's, stay with Tad and his story)

As Jenny’s wrath is set in motion, Tad notices Dorks’ laptop in her backpack and tells her to quickly write a complaint to www.JustJustice.mag about Jenny. Just before death rolls over them, the complaint is sent off and Jenny is sucked up into the computer, never to be seen again. (Does this last part happen on their way home from the party?)

Okay I think Tonja has done a great job on this.  I didn't find to much to work on and what I did find I think are fairly easy fixes.  Those are my red lines now it's your turn to give Tonja your red lines.  Please put them in the comments!



I told you if I recieved an entry you would be the first to know.  Well I am happy to report that I have received an entry for Stand Out Synopsis.  I want to thank Tonja Drecker for submitting her synopsis for review.  A side note:  You will notice the synopsis is posted as a whole.  The last 3 or 4 paragraphs are what I want to consentrate on though. Those are the paragraphs Tonja has asked for help on.  I did this because the paragraphs are short and it gives us a better feel for the entire work.

If your synposis is on the shorter side, please (1 to 2 pages tops)  I will post the entire sysnopsis.  Please use reason when submitting.

I have read the synopsis and have entered my notes in red for you to see. Remember, please add you recommendations and advice for Tonja in the comments section of the post.  And be nice, we are all here to help each other out.  :-)


Title: Just Justice
Author: Tonja Drecker
Genre: Middle-Grade
Fifth-grade Tad Bradford’s older sister, Dorothy (a.k.a. Dorks), has turned into the world’s largest jerk. Thanks to her, and a knack for finding trouble, Tad is facing detention and hence being grounded from Saturday’s baseball game. When his attempts to fix the situation fail he looks for help from a website promising to solve all problems, www.JustJustice.mag.  However, he is careful not to mention the ongoing war with Dorks—he wants to deal with her personally. ( I have no problem here. It sounds good to me)

Almost miraculously, a bee-sting sends his teacher to the hospital before she can make his detention official, saving his chance to go to the baseball game. It does not take long before new troubles pile up and are promptly referred to www.JustJustice.mag ( I must admit this sentence bothers me. How are they referred to the web site?) Freak accidents causing broken arms and legs follow, insuring that all  problems vanish – but only for Tad.

Jenny, a girl pictured on the website, appears one night in his bedroom, claiming to be the reason behind his good fortune. (That would freak me out) All she wants in return is his friendship. Tad believes she is a figment of his imagination, his sub-conscious releasing feelings of guilt. Still, (Not sure you need Still) after his next visit to www.JustJustice.mag solves his problems by breaking his teacher’s legs, Tad decides not to use the website again.

In Dorks’ diary Tad discovers the reason behind her strange behavior; her boy-friend is the neighborhood bully, Dan Natters. (Can you tell us why she is acting strange? I'd put the boyfriend part in a separate sentence.  I keep wanting to read it as one and it's confusing that way.) Dorks threatens to send Dan after Tad if he divulges her secret to anyone. Jenny is furious that Tad isn’t seeking her assistance anymore and reminds him that as his friend, she will always be there to help him - especially to resolve his dispute with Dorks. But Tad is too creeped-out to want anything from Jenny, he just wants but Jenny to leave him alone.

Tad’s best friend, Pete, grows jealous of his seemingly good luck and decides to use www.JustJustice.mag himself. When Pete’s problem is solved with his father almost dying in a car accident, Tad decides that its finally time to find out more about the mysterious website. Before he gets a chance, Dan and his friends give him the painful reminder to leave Dorks alone. But Tad has no intention on obeying (Why?).

Thursday, October 20, 2011

Use or Lose It!



It amazes me how true that one simple statement is.  It can be targeted at so many things in life.  Some things are like riding a bike. Some things well, they just don't come back, or at least not that easily. 

For me it's math.  I'm not talking adding and subtracting, it's that damn multiplition table that gets me every time. You see my son is working on this in school and most nights I'm the one who helps him with his homework.  He does it, I correct it.  Hello, not a good combination!  It's the blind leading the blind here.  Oh, don't get me wrong, I know the table, but my 9's table? Yeah, don't ask me for answers above six.  I have printed out the table for reference, for both of us, and only use it in dire straights.  My husband printed out another one for my younger son to learn, so in my house all three of us are learning our mulitplication table.

I can't remember the last time I actually needed it, so I haven't used it, and with calcultor's these days technically you don't need it.  But you do, you really do! 

School was hard me back then.  I graduated, I suffered but prevailed.  I even made it to college when so many people thought I might not.  I graduated with an English Literature Degree.  I prevailed, Damn it.  I have my war scars- I won.

Now I have to fight all over again. Damn. On to round two!  Why?  For my boys,  it's work that is worth the effort. It's worth it to me that they know, it might not be easy, but it feels pretty darn good when you get it.

I'm hoping when I get an agent the same will happen, they see me at night working on my books, they see the hours that go into it.  Deep down I know they know nothing happens over night, and the reward is so much sweeter when you worked for it.

Tell me what you lost and had to learn all over again, I'll be hitting the flash cards.

Monday, October 17, 2011

It's the season for Reunions!



 I know I was going to leave Monday's open, but I felt like I haven't posted in a awhile and to be honest, I missed you guys!  I have been extremely  busy lately and I haven't gotten to many blogs, but I'm hoping to change that.  If I haven't gotten to you I will.  Now off to our normally scheduled post:

Yes, dare I say it. Not only is the holiday season fast approaching, but so are reunions.  In fact we are actually in the thick of it right now.  Most people have their high school reunions just before Halloween or right after Thanksgiving.  My husband's was this past Saturday.  Most spouses I'm told usually aren't very excited about reunions, and why should they?  After all it's not there reunion.  I was looking forward to it a little though.  You see I met my husband in college, but since we have been together for over 15 years I have already meet many of this high school friends.  My husband doesn't talk to many of them, but there are still many we do see, and coming from a small town, people are all ways connected.

It was fun to see people I haven't seen in years. It was fun hearing the old stories resurface, although most of the talk was about more current events. We dropped the kids off at my husbands parent's house then headed about twenty minutes away to the reunion.  It poured.  Funny because it was beautiful all day long.  Anyway, it's got me to thinking about reunions you always see in the movies.  Why is it that in the movies the renunion is always at the high school, and in real life it is always at some hotel, or bar, or restuarant?  I'd love for my next reunion to be at my high school.  With my luck it will be in Manhattan again at some bar/restuarant and I won't be able to hear any one again.  Hello i haven't sseen you in twenty years, I'd like to talk to you not scream at you!

Anyway, we had tons of fun.  It will be interesting how things turn out in the next ten years, or when ever who ever is in charged decides to hold it.  But then again I know who is in charge, she was at our wedding, do maybe next time I just call her.  Funny how things turn out.

What about you?  Have you gone to your high school reunion yet?  What are you looking forward too?  tell me, I'll be looking at old photos!

Thursday, October 13, 2011

Thank You, Thank You!

I received an award last week, sorry it took me so long to post about my good news.  Things have been crazy in my little world lately.  I have been trying to do edits on my ms and I have a new critique partner so I've been busy there as well.  I' have been swamped with blog posting.  I have so many people I follow it is getting really hard to get to everyone- if I haven't gotten to you it's not that I don't care, I'll get to your blog I promise.  There are just so many hours in a day/week.

Now according to the rules of the 7 x 7 link award I have to post 7 posts in each category- Can I break the rules?  This is making me do homework I really don't have time for, So instead I have decided to pick 7 blogs to post a link too which I believe are worthy of suck an award.  Who am I kidding we are all worthy, we work hard at our blogs, or writing, our jobs, our lives, BUT I can only pick 7- sorry.  :-(

So here are my seven

Sean at flish blog wash because I love the quirkiness of his posts.  He always buts a smile on my face.

Susana Hill because she is a fabulous children's book author and has great helpful fun ways to help those of us still trying to make our way into the publishing world.

My friends at Pinch of Romance for my romantic side!

Rachel at blackbird in my window because she has such a cool site!

Creative Chatter because I love her honesty and dedication. Go girl!

Abby over at abbyfowler, just because I think she's great

Matthew  over at The Quintessentially Questionable Query Experiment

So there are my seven, make sure you go visit there sites because if they weren't great they wouldn't be here!

Thursday, October 6, 2011

You know you are busy when.....

You miss your own birthday!  I have been reading tons of blogs lately about how people have reached mile stones on their blog. Who have reached 300 followers, and who has had an anniversary.  I like to call it birthday- it's easier to spell. LOL

Any way, I have been so busy lately I had no idea my birthday has passed. With everything on my palate right now, I had no idea it passed.  Oh, well.  I'm still one, and is the important part.  I still here, still writing, making friends, and being busy in this crazy world and connecting to so many fabulous people is how I got to be one years old in the first place. So I want to say thank you, and have a piece of cake on me.

Monday, October 3, 2011

Stand Out Synopsis - Some Sad News



Still no posts today for synopsis.  Sorry guys.  We were on a great roll there for two straight weeks, and I really enjoyed the ride. Problem is, the ride stops when the writers stop submitting, so due to time constraints I am leaving Mondays open.  When I get a request for a critque I will post it, until then

Happy Monday!